- The editing style you've used is effective and creates a disorientating feel for things like the abduction and reflects the mothers mental state of being after realising her daughter has been taken - I like the sound choice and the thoughtful relationship between the visual action and the music. - The finishing shot of the empty swing is a great touch! - I like that the music begins over the top of the logo in the beginning of the film, this keeps the logo as part of the main event and makes for a smooth transition
For next time - think at the concept stage about narrative. If a storyline and characters are too predictable/cliche', it detracts from the suspense and tension because the audience may feel like they've watched that story before (although it's a different version). Think about interesting ways to tell a well-known narrative that keeps the audience guessing... (like the predictable 'bad guy' in the duffle coat actually being the hero and the unsuspecting dad-like character is the one who abducts the child... or potentially making a twist in the tale so the audience doesn't know until afterwards that the little girl is taken). - Also think about the way you introduce the audience to your characters. What conventional clues do you give them that indicates what sort of characters you're involving in your story. Introducing the 'kidnapper' slightly earlier than him just getting out of the car could have been more effective. The audience has time to work out that this guy is going to hurt someone and starts to feel angst for the vulnerable character. - Think about setting very carefully. One of the conventions of a thriller is setting. If you are filming an abduction scene, you want the verisimilitude of it being a realistic situation. A girl being abducted in broad daylight in a busy park is not necessarily as scary as a little girl 'wandering off' to a secluded place where there's no one to help her or hear her screaming. Remember the setting in a thriller is almost a character in itself! It adds a whole layer of tone and feel to the film and storyline. - Title - I like the font you've used. It just could be a lot more of a focus point, potentially on a black screen? It almost gets lost when you have a small title overall on action so the audience is watching action on screen and not paying attention to the title. It works for credits but a title needs to be more centre of focus - also have a think about title sequence / opening sequence conventions and playing with visual imagery. With the name 'sweetness' there could have been a good opportunity to play around with some iconography / imagery in-between action shots in the beginning to really solidify the link between the 'sweets' and the title and the pending abduction
Hi Grace
ReplyDeleteOverall Score: 17/20
- The editing style you've used is effective and creates a disorientating feel for things like the abduction and reflects the mothers mental state of being after realising her daughter has been taken
- I like the sound choice and the thoughtful relationship between the visual action and the music.
- The finishing shot of the empty swing is a great touch!
- I like that the music begins over the top of the logo in the beginning of the film, this keeps the logo as part of the main event and makes for a smooth transition
For next time
- think at the concept stage about narrative. If a storyline and characters are too predictable/cliche', it detracts from the suspense and tension because the audience may feel like they've watched that story before (although it's a different version). Think about interesting ways to tell a well-known narrative that keeps the audience guessing... (like the predictable 'bad guy' in the duffle coat actually being the hero and the unsuspecting dad-like character is the one who abducts the child... or potentially making a twist in the tale so the audience doesn't know until afterwards that the little girl is taken).
- Also think about the way you introduce the audience to your characters. What conventional clues do you give them that indicates what sort of characters you're involving in your story. Introducing the 'kidnapper' slightly earlier than him just getting out of the car could have been more effective. The audience has time to work out that this guy is going to hurt someone and starts to feel angst for the vulnerable character.
- Think about setting very carefully. One of the conventions of a thriller is setting. If you are filming an abduction scene, you want the verisimilitude of it being a realistic situation. A girl being abducted in broad daylight in a busy park is not necessarily as scary as a little girl 'wandering off' to a secluded place where there's no one to help her or hear her screaming. Remember the setting in a thriller is almost a character in itself! It adds a whole layer of tone and feel to the film and storyline.
- Title - I like the font you've used. It just could be a lot more of a focus point, potentially on a black screen? It almost gets lost when you have a small title overall on action so the audience is watching action on screen and not paying attention to the title. It works for credits but a title needs to be more centre of focus
- also have a think about title sequence / opening sequence conventions and playing with visual imagery. With the name 'sweetness' there could have been a good opportunity to play around with some iconography / imagery in-between action shots in the beginning to really solidify the link between the 'sweets' and the title and the pending abduction